The court? My home!
We dreaded to practice yet leaped for games
Home of the cougars we were proud to be
From walking through yall ghetto halls to sweating down your raggedy gyms
Badgers were no match for cougars
Your games bored me
Sorry! get clue… who’s the best? Guess who
Yea we knew we were stars GOO COUGARS we screamed it loud
Till our end season
We were devastated to leave
The place we called home, We watched each other grow
We were a family
We've now drifted apart years gone past haven't even stepped on a court together
But hey once a cougar always a cougar…
Right?
I like how the court was your home, and how it was a "remembrance" to your old basketball team.
ReplyDeletehow do you think it was a remembrance? Elaborate. Dig deeper
DeleteIt was a remembrance because she's looking back at her old team, and appreciating them
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DeleteI liked all of it haha
DeleteWhat did you like about all of it?
DeleteI liked how you put games into your poem, such as "Your games bored me Sorry! get clue… who’s the best? Guess who". I also liked how your poem is very original and you wrote about your past school as your home.
ReplyDeleteI like how she used all caps. It made me feel as if they were actually at a game. The poem overrall was really good, but i especially liked that part.
ReplyDeletei liked how she put her mascot in the poem.
ReplyDeleteI think this poem was short and sweet. It was enjoyable to hear the rhymes throughout the poem and I liked when you added that extra, "Right?" at the end.
ReplyDeletewhere was it rhyming
Delete"Sorry! get clue… who’s the best? Guess who"
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DeleteI like how you said that you don't always have to be around your other team members because you'll always be apart of that team even when you're not there.
ReplyDeleteI like how you take pride as being a cougar even though you transferred.
ReplyDeleteGo girl!!
ReplyDeleteYour poem was well written. The part that caught most of my attention was " sorry get a clue" because you were referencing to a game. Nice wordplay. I also like the question at the end because it gives the audience something to think about.
I liked how it edned in a question it made your poem more mature for 1 7th grader. Continue making poems, you really have something here!
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DeleteI'm confused on the part where you said 17th grader, but i agree on how good she is at making poems
DeleteHow does a question make her poem mature for a 7th grader?
Deletelol she does
DeleteI meant a 7th grader
DeleteGabby C. it makes her poem mature because she doesn't end it in a cliche and happy or sad. Its almost like she questioned herself in the poem
Deletei like how your poem told a story of how the school wasnt so uptight but it realy didnt matter because your team was your family and family lives(Dwells) in a place in your heart so therefore your poem was great
ReplyDeletewhat figurative language was your fav?
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DeleteI like how you used your old school instead of like a court but still referring to basketball and your word play with the games Sorry and Guess who
ReplyDeleteI liked when you said you dont always have to be around the other people you played with
ReplyDeleteExplain this more
DeleteIs this poem about your old school before South Loop? How much of a difference was it? But back to the poem, I liked how you said you dreaded to practice, but leaped for games. Does that mean that you were so confident about your skill that you don't need practice?
ReplyDeleteyes its about my old school and yes that is what the dreaded for practice meant.
DeleteI really like how your poem talked about your old school's basketball team and how you described that as your home. I also like the line where it says "Sorry! get clue… who’s the best? Guess who".
ReplyDeleteYou really emphasized how much you love not only the sport you played but the school and team you played for. You did I good job explaining the hall and gym. I could also see that you had a good bond with all of your teammates and that's what really made you love the game. Ready for next season?
ReplyDeleteGood Job!
Also to add on, I like how much confidence you had in you and your team!
Deleteyesssssssss im ready for our next season were gonna beat learn!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DeleteI liked the vocabulary that you used in your poem especially because it had it own sort of rhythm to it. Instead of saying we feared you said "we dreaded." Also when you said "you all" you said "yall." I like how you did something that was important in your life and how you still remember it. I think you could have used some figurative language, like similes in places.
ReplyDeletei like how you were talking about your team and how you were family because it shows how even though you left you still feel connected to them because of the season you and your players played. Also how you said you dreaded for practice but you were happy to play games
ReplyDeleteI like how you still honor and remember your past basketball team from your old school. I liked how you called that your home instead of an actual house. I also liked how you said that you'll always be a cougar even though you drifted away from your teammates.
ReplyDeleteMalayjah,
ReplyDeleteI had no idea that you were new to South Loop last year. Even though I had you as a student for the whole year, I never would have guessed it. Your poem effectively captures the nostalgia for an old school and actually had me thinking about the first school I went to, back in the day. The thing I lie about this poem the most is you capture a universal feeling...people act like they will never be able to imagine their lives without their friends but times change and people move on....and they forget. It's a sad reality of life.
I'm really proud of how you took up the idea about the board games...I guess this is one poem we wrote together.
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ReplyDeletei like how you showed that any where can be your home and will always be your home
I thought you did a good job at expressing your feelings at your last school. I also thought you did a good job almost mixing the "ego trippin" poem with your "home" poem intentional, or not.
ReplyDeleteconfused i didnt do ego trippin...
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