I AM HOME
My first, memories were when I walked into a four
floor townhouse across from a solider field.
My feet making making a pitter-patter sound on
The cold bare floor.
I still remember the warm feeling of being a four
Year old in a new place.
That feeling you get when your parents tell you
That your bedroom was on the top floor with your
Own bed, and a beautiful view of the city.
That feeling when you realize how lucky you are.
I am home
I remember my parents driving into the 6ft 4 garage
With my new sister in my mom’s arms.
I remember running up the stairs plowing through the
Crowd of people telling them that my sister is here.
I found out that most of the time they like to cry, eat,
And sleep.
But that didn’t stop me from trying to play toy trains
With her, for years until I realized that girls mostly
Played with dolls and princesses.
I am home
Four years later my mom is in the ER about to have
Her fourth.
Both my sisters are in the hall playin’ princesses and
I’m outside wondering if I’ll get another sister or a
Brother.
I go to get a bite to eat, and 15 minutes later my dad
Walks up and says the baby is born.
A few minutes later I got to hold my baby brother
In my own arms, holding his hands which were as
Small as a pumpkin seed.
I am content.
I am home
I was homeschooled all my life until now.
My parents had decided to send me to public school,
Cause gettin’ good grades would get me into a good
High school.
My family dropped me off and I walked inside to class
Only to see that it seemed like world war three
Inside, I was scared to walk in, scared for my
Current, and future self.
Now I wake up at 6:15 every morning and go to
School with pride.
The trees seem full of joy, unlike they used to.
Lookin’ back I see what I’ve gone through to get to
This moment, and I smile because it’s no small victory
And I realize that I can get Past this, because I am
Confident.
I am home
I liked how you were honest and sharing your experiences how you felt about coming to a public school in 7th grad for the first time in your life
ReplyDeletei like how you read it like a story of your life. i like how you described how scary it was going to public school.
ReplyDeletewhat time did you wake up for home school
ReplyDeleteFloyd- i liked how you described how you felt when you were a four year old and how you told us about your first yer at public school
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ReplyDeletei like how he talked about his family in
ReplyDeletethen turned it to us being war war 3
This sounded a lot like your home poem. I liked how it was talking about being new at school because I can relate to that feeling as well. I really felt the emotion when you were talking about your baby brother.
ReplyDeleteI love how you started from the beginning of the time when you first moved into your house until now. It definitely expressed your identity. The literary devices used really captured how you were feeling at the moment and how you saw the world at that time.
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ReplyDeleteI like the similes you used such as World War 3 and the repetition of I Am Home or I Remember.I also liked the personification you used of the trees at the end of your poem. I like how we got to know how it is like for your family.
ReplyDeleteI wish you could have talked about more what happened on the weekend
DeleteI like how you described the events that were most important to you and also used different words to help convey those emotions throughout your poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you talked about your family and school. This reminded me of the a place called home poem. I also liked how you started from the past and built up to the present.
ReplyDeletei like how you felt about going to a school and how you felt about your first time at home it gave me an image of you in you house. it also made me think and know how you were able to adapt to our school
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Deletei like your poem because i was able to relate to it deeply bc its hard every two years another baby popping out which means more responsblity for you so gea poem
ReplyDeleteI like how you had a different perspective of having a new sibling because most people loose the attention. I also liked how you explained the new adventures meaning coming to a public school. I have a question: Was your siblings home schooled to?
ReplyDeletei like how you described how it felt to go from being home schooled for 7 school years to becoming a part of a whole new situation in a how new environment even though you did compares us something pretty violent i see where your coming from and i can connect because last year was my first year at south loop and it was crazy first walking into the class with people laughing at me staring at me and asking the weirdest questions like we did to you since you were home schooled and we didn't know what that is like
ReplyDeleteI really appreciated how the journey of this poem unfolded, and my favorite part of the poem was the end, when you got really honest about the experience of being in a school for the first time as a 7th grader. I guess this would feel like WWIII, for someone used to something so different. I think that description was particularly effective because it allowed your peers to understand how you perceived the experience--which may not have been the whole truth, but it was your truth.
ReplyDeleteThe journey that unfolds in this poem allows us to see on one hand how important your family is to you, while on the other, it allows us to grow up with you, and experience these new life changes through your eyes.
The repetition of the the line I am home is effective as a measure to show gratitude. Nice work.
Richard- I really liked how your poem was talking about your home and that you were home school.
ReplyDeleteI like how you described us as World War 3, which hasn't even happened yet, which explains a lot about us. It seemed like you learned pretty fast to fit in with our crazy class, even though you had no experience in an actual public school, and changing your entire life around.(waking up at 6:15 AM) I saw some similes and repetition.
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What time did your mom end home school?
ReplyDeleteWhat time did you realize it was done for home schooling??
ReplyDeletegiorgina -i really like how you shared your personal life
ReplyDeleteBraun your poem really represented your identity. It was pretty much a journey of your life. I love the repetition of I am home. Last but not least, it was brave to share how you truly felt about coming to a public school.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you were brave enough to tell about your life and journey. i see your love your home and your house looks nice and big. Im glad you came to South Loop and now you are happy with the environment and your proud
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