perfect
I'm not the only kid
who grew up surrounded
by ball players and they say practice makes perfect
but it really doesn't someone
is only perfect when the our worth
and no one is it just like the man and lady
who tells you what to do
they are not perfect makers they our parents
they know i'm not going to be perfect
but i work and work to be perfect
but i'm getting better and my head
i wonder why i'm putting in all the work
to be perfect thinking in my head i'm so close
to being there but i'm not so as i grew up
i learned something their is no such thing as perfect
where did it come from a perfect job
and perfect house we our all humans
on a human world most our happy
and nice but not perfect it unreal untouchable
So when i think off perfect i think off no one just like when i was little i wanted to be perfect so bad but no one told me that perfect is not such thing
I like how you explained that your not perfect at basketball but you are putting in the effort to be perfect.
ReplyDeletei liked how you were explaining how you wanted to be perfect, but you never thought anyone was perfect. i think the name ties in really well with the rest of your poem. nice job.
ReplyDeleteGiorgina- I like how you told ever one that you don't have to be good at everything
ReplyDeleteI like how you said there is no such thing as perfect
ReplyDeletei like how you think you can't be perfect and say that practice makes perfect. i also couldn't really hear anything
ReplyDeleteI liked the repetition of perfect throughout the poem, and how much it relates to many things in your life.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you said that not everybody is not perfect.
ReplyDeleteI like how you talk about the idea of perfection. It's interesting. good job !!
ReplyDeleteRichard- I liked how your poem was talking about basketball and how everyone isn't perfect.
ReplyDeletei love how you said know ones perfect and it took you sometime to learn that
ReplyDeleteCAHLILL good job i like how you talked about how you grew up with people always telling you to do thin gs that you know wouldn't work and how you said there is no such thing as being perfect even though we all thing about being perfect
ReplyDeleteDarryl- I enjoyed this poem and it seemed like you put lot of time and effort in
ReplyDeletei like how you were taking about how you learned that you cant be perfect, and how you are working hard to be the best
ReplyDeleteI liked how you explained how nobody perfect in the life that you live in and some that others live is also not perfect as well.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you made the poem talk about how everything in the world was not perfect and how you compared to how you learned to like how the world actually is.
ReplyDeleteawnnnnn good job cahlil. i liked how you talked about how you grew up with people telling you things but you knew that everybody isn't perfect but you always try your best to be the best basketball player you can be.
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