JANE DOE SOLDIER
I'm a rare soldier like my disorder because a fighter is me
I come to school everyday to constantly be reminded that i'm not a regular kid
But it's ok I'm about to tell my story of a jane doe soldier
I've been through alot and it's not right but god gave me these
Challenges because he knew i would fight to the end
You know the saying don't judge a book by it's cover but they do it everyday
They always judge me because they see a happy strong person can't believe
how much i've been through and still have a smile on my face but
THAT'S- JUST- THE COVER!
Behind that cover you see a struggling girl with thoughts of ending the life god
Has given to me so don't judge me on my smile or my courage
don't judge me on what you can see i’m a girl fighting an incurable disease
don’t judge me because you only
read the title page
It's hard to explain to my peers what i'm going though
so i used to say look it up on google
but does that really break down the meaning of it all how it affects you
Physically
emotionally
mentally
Does it tell you
but just like my disorder which we all have
whether it was confirmed by a doctor or determined in life
we all have something that's not in order the thing is we tend to manage it
in different ways
medication
Wheeping
Substance abuse
Smoking
Eating
Depression
Which means
i'm not the only soldier fighting a battle
I really loved your poem, because it made me realize that just because one looks happy, it doesn't mean they are.
ReplyDeleteThe part the really got to me was the part when you admitted to the thoughts of suicide, It really showed how much this can overwhelmed a person especially from a young age. I think it was really good
ReplyDeleteYour poem was very emotional. I can tell when you were presenting that you felt sad all over again. I also like how you had a lot of confidence to tell us about your disorder instead of keeping it a secrete and letting people discourage you because you not like them. Overall you did a very good job.
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ReplyDeleteyou did gooddddddd! i can feel where you are coming from. it was a good poem. you always saying dont judge a book by its cover and preaching and it was like i never saw this side of you before. it was like a good meaning for others not to look at you some type of way for what you have. you also did a good job memorizing it even though you mixed up a few words
ReplyDeletei really like this poem. it shows the struggles you go through and how you fight day after day to survive. you talk about how people are rude to you as well. i think this poem is really inspirational to anyone who's going through anything right now.
ReplyDeleteI like how you had the courage to talk about your disorder and how people judge you about it. I like how you also said that you're a soldier trying to win a battle
ReplyDeletei read over it and i liked how you compared yourself to a rare soldier. In my opinion this was a very brave poem. What does Jane doe soldier mean?
ReplyDeleteDarryl- I liked how you used the term Jane Doe Soldier.
ReplyDeletei really liked yours poem i thought you shared everything and you were not scared to show it. - giorgina
ReplyDeleteThat was so good! I love how you incorporated your disease and how it affects you. You tied everything together at the end by saying we all have disorders and not everyone's perfect. I'm glad you're able to share all of this harsh information about your life. Again, nice job.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and how you said everyone is fighting their own battle. You also really told alot about yourself through this poem. I also liked your title very clever. I think that you though could have used more figurative language in it though.
ReplyDeletei did i used several pieces its just so good its going to take a smart person to figure it out (&:
DeleteI really enjoyed the amount of emotion and feeling that you put into each and every part of your poem when you read each stanza. I also liked how you gave examples of how there is no such thing as normal and that there is something wrong with all us.
ReplyDeleteMalayjah- Daijah girl that was AMAZINGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!! you did soo good explaining to us what your going through and telling us how no one really knows what you go through because you hide it everyday behind a laugh and smile. i cant believe you memorized that so well!
ReplyDeleteDaijah Daijah you did fabulous. Your comparison to Jane doe Soldier was amazing. The way you presented what jane doe and how you fight battles every day shows you re very strong and brave. No one understood from the first day of school what was wrong an you weren't happy about all the questions because you looked different to others. But with this poem it really represents your identity and what you had to go through. Fantastic!!!
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DeleteThis poem was beautiful...I love the way you took the opportunity to bring your journey full circle. I will never forget how you asked to speak to your peers at the beginning of the year to discuss your medical condition, and the stares and the whispers.
ReplyDeleteFor me, this poem shows your resilience and your strength. You are going through something not many of your peers could handle. I am so impressed with the fact that you fight the good fight every day, and more importantly, you keep a smile on your face. You have a really great sense of humor, and it's been fun to joke around with you and banter back and forth all year.
You can clearly tell you spent a tremendous amount of time crafting and composing the poem, and adding small touches here and there, from the pic to the red, white and blue of the title. Speaking of the title, that was amazing as well. I'm super impressed. Mic drop.
thank you i wouldnt have done that without your help for the past two years you helped me be able to be confident in your class if it wasnt for you i wouldnt have the courage to get up there and say those things and you bring the smile i have everyday when waiting to get out of math im waiting to get a joke from you and that prepared me for ziolo so i just want to say thank you for everything
Deletei really liked how you explained not medically what it was, but how it affected you
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Richard: I really liked how you were talking about the disorder that you are currenty going through. I also liked how you were expressing your poem in front of everybody.
ReplyDeleteBraun-I think you did great at a lot of things in this poem. But you did the best at speaking from the heart and what you have been through.
ReplyDeletei like how your were able to put yourself out and talk about your disorder and how you were talking about the stuff you go through in your everyday life in the poema
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