Nnae I love you
Love
One word, one syllable, one meaning
Love
An intense feeling of deep affection
Love
What I feel for you
Nnae from the day you were conceived you were my everything
From the minute that you breath the same air in my lungs
Said the same words on my tongue
you were the death of me
But now you’re growing up
Starting school soon
Three different more summers
And three different more months June
So it’s time you know
It’s time you know why every time you come home
Believing that you will see your sister
you find out she’s not there
It’s time you know why you only see me every other weekend
Why when you look around
I’m not there
Nnae,
I’m sorry I put you through so much pain
Everytime I leave
you cry
Not pretty tears like the ones in the movies
Or the Tv shows
Or the Commercials
No, big warm salty droplets of rain falling down each side of your cheek
as you screech at the top of your lungs
The ones that breath the same air as mine
And the lips the fold into words that rest on your tongue
Leaving you is like leaving the sun
Stark
Dark
Scary as hell
But staying with you and watching you grow is like calming hug to my soul
Nnae,
Before you were born even the you were my everything I hated you
Mad that I wouldn’t be my dad’s only child
Scared you would take my place in my dad’s heart
....but now I can’t imagine life without you
When I feel blue
You’re there
Already knocking on my bedroom door
Bathroom door
Closet door
And the door in my heart
Scared?
Nnae I’m scared
Scared that you will grow up not really thinking I’m your sister,
Scared that you won’t see me as apart of your life
Family
World
Scared that you won’t love me
Nnae I love you
Love
eight words, 1 syllable, one meaning
Love
An intense feeling of deep affection
Love
What I feel for you
I like how you incorporated a language we don't speak that you speak into your poem. I don't know what its like to be close to your sibling, but this poem gave an insight on that.
ReplyDeleteI could really feel the love through your poem. I never the living situations with your brother and how hard it is for you. I could't imagine how hard it was to write this poem. Its very loving! The way you described your love was amazing. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteSidney this was very emotional for me because I connect in many ways with my half siblings. I love that you are "talking" to your brother as you read the poem and not the audience. This is a very nice written spoken word poem because you've went into your culture with the word "nnae" and even though it's different it represents you. I love the repetition of love.
ReplyDeleteI really feel the love through this poem. I can relate to feeling jealous at first, and then becoming closer and more welcoming. Very good poem sidney!!
ReplyDeleteStepheni- I never knew you had a brother, so this poem shows how you feel for your brother, and how much you care for him. Good Job
ReplyDeleteGood Job. It was a very good poem. I can feel the love you have for your brother and the way you guys bond it. It reminded me how me and my brother are. It made me feel emotional.
ReplyDeleteI did not know you had siblings but I can connect with this poem because I have 3 big sisters and 1 little brother
ReplyDeleteI liked how you talked about your little brother. I also liked how you acknowledged your love for your brother. I think your poem was well spoken and well put together.
ReplyDeletei like how you repeated a few words like love to show how you fee about your brother or the words that describe him.Also how you were talking about how at first you did not like him at first but now you love your brother
ReplyDeleteI really like the constant reminder you put into your poem for the amount of love that you share with your brother and told the reasons why you feel those emotions.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you explained to all of us the love you and your brother have for each other and how much you need each other more than anything.
ReplyDeleteGiorgina-i really like your poem and talked a little in your own language and how you told your feeling with your bother
ReplyDeleteI really love how you incorporated the word "Nnae" into your poem. It really shows how important your little brother is to you and how big of a role he plays to you in your life. I really liked how your first stanza was also your last. I thought that was very unique. I loved how delicately and smoothly all of your literary devices and emotions were woven in.
ReplyDeleteBraun-I know from experience how you feel because I have been through the same thing with my brother, and I know how hard it is and it must be hard to write and go in depth with your feeling then and now.
ReplyDeleteI liked the repetition of the word love and the picture you have it really helps me draw connections between you and your brother.
ReplyDeleteSidney,
ReplyDeleteThis poem is such a gift...not only to your brother, but to your classmates and me as well. I had no idea you had a little brother, and I appreciate the way you opened up and shared these powerful images of your relationship. I'm especially taken with the fear you share in that your brother may not continue to regard you as his sister...for me, this reminds me of Nova's poem written to her brother, Cody.
You have a lot of skill as a poet, especially in some of your descriptions: "Leaving you is like leaving the sun/Stark/Dark/Scary as hell." The rhetorical strategy of repetition is an effective way to bring the poem fun circle at the end.
Proud of you, and this poem.