The struggle
1 out of 13 takes the fall, the oldest
Yet she’s only 13
13 and has so many responsibility and
people counting on her.
Have straight A’s, Play like Maya
Watch over the kids
Marry poppins
Clean the house
Cinderella
But they don't understand
How steep the mountain is you have to climb to go
From an B student to a A student
The practice and time that you must put into
“Shake em out they shoes” onna court
They don't get how hard it is…
Everything was sacrificed for me so i have to be the best i can,
But it's so hard
My mom
She gave up her childhood to raise me and my dad
He gave up his whole life of playing ball for me
So how am i supposed to make it up to them?
I just pray i can make it right..
For them
I wouldn't be able to live with myself, if i didn't make them proud
I can see the look of disappointment in their eyes if i fail
I can feel the walls closing in on me whenever i mess up
They don't understand how hard it is
To make someone proud
They don't understand
The struggle
Stepheni- I like how you made this picture that being the oldest is not easy and you have to work for what you want.
ReplyDeleteI love this poem so much! it gives a good insight on your life and what you have to do as a person.
ReplyDeleteI really love your poem.I can relate to the struggle of trying to please everyone. I can also to relate to being the oldest out of my family. This poem was very well thought out!!
ReplyDeleteI can relate to this a little and that is why I liked your poem. The pressure to be the best, to work like the best, to be on top. Teenage years are hard and you did a good job channeling that into your poem.
ReplyDeleteGiorgina-i really love the poem and told us that everything is not eyes an how you work hard to make your parents proud
ReplyDeletei like how you were talking about the struggles and how you want to make your parents proud because of what they sacrificed which shows that you will even sacrifice because of what they did for you.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you talked about how it's hard being a kid. I can relate to you when you say that you have to clean up or watch siblings.
ReplyDeleteBraun-I think you did a great job putting your heart into how you felt/feel, and how you show your audience how your life is and not how you want it to be. Also putting your relationships into it.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you compared yourself to characters from stories that got mostly everything handed to them while you show n example as to how you try to be a hard-working person.
ReplyDeletei liked your picture. it kind of brought out what you was talking about in your poem. I couldn't really connect with it but i can understand where you coming from.
ReplyDeleteI like how you incorporated Disney characters. You said "Watch over the kids Mary Poppins Clean the house Cinderella" I really enjoyed that and also how you used the title as the last sentence also.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your poem and I think its very deep
ReplyDeleteI liked how you referenced the quotes in your poem and how you did something about real life struggles
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