What a special brother you are to me
I was born with yo eyes, yo nose, and yo smile
People say they “look like twins, Apollo and Artemis”
30 stitches 3 inches till brain damage
Went through your tissue
I still remember the day
Long scar for the rest of your life but went to short
We have the best connection like no other
Like a string that never breaks
Like a truth that never bends
Like a bond that never ends
I watch everything you do
I listen to everything you say
I look up to you
Be careful what you do..cause I’m always right behind you
We may disagree but at the end,
We lay side by side
You are the light to my day
You stand out in this dark crowd
Almost got killed 2 times
And I pray, I pray that it won't never happen again
We go through our moments together like
R.I.P Papa G
Daddy leaving and
Mommy yelling
The petrifying moments we go through
But we always stick together
Cause it's true when they say “blood thicker than water”
As kids we always stayed together
We fought, we laughed, we hugged, we cried
But never seemed to tell each other “I Love You”
You are my other half
It hurts me to see the pain you go through
Hurts me even more cause ain't nothing i could do
My big brother
Your little sister
A special brother we all love
always a special brother to me
You're poem was really cute and I love the picture
ReplyDeleteI like how you wasn't scared to talk about his disability. You seemed very confident about your poem, it shows that you can put all the argument you have had with him and make good memories out of them
ReplyDeleteI love your poem. I'm glad you talk about the struggles you and your brother go through together. I also like the rhymes. Good job
ReplyDeleteI loved you poem. It really reminded me of Nova's poem about her poem.
ReplyDeleteI have a few questions:
What is it about him that you can't do anything about it, and in the beginning what do you mean "30 stitches 3 inches till brain damage..went through your tissue"
i like how you said people say we look like twins i say that all the time
ReplyDeletethe poam was really good and liked the pic
ReplyDeleteAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH Kennedy i didn't know your poem was that good i liked when you started rhyming then you brought your situation with your mom and dad into it
ReplyDeleteMi wuvvvvvvvved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This poem is very loving. I can tell that you and your brother do have a special bond that is hard to break. I don't really know what its like to have big brother but from this poem I can understand the connection and love that you feel for him. I liked how you mentioned that people think ya'll are twins "Apollo and Artemis".
ReplyDeleteGood job!
Yass Kennedy, you did really good. I love that you show the relationship you have with your brother. You love him very much and I know when he goes through pain it really hurts you because in 4th grade you were bawling out crying more than he was. You guys really do look like twins and I feel that same connection with my brother. Even though we don't say we love each other to our brothers I can tell that you love him very much.
ReplyDeleteThat was so good! I loved everything about it from the passion, the multi modal to the title! I really loved how you incorporated that you sometimes do fight and you're not always perfect and happy all the time because that is reality. Your allusion "Apollo and Artemis" was really tied in well and i loved it so much! Great job!
ReplyDeletei like how you kept on reminding us that you are still siblings and that you stick together. also how during the poem where it ended in ends rhyming and it actually made sense and each stanza meant something and had some meaning
ReplyDeleteI liked how you had repetition and more importantly talked about your brother in a good way your poem was very serious and was special since it was on the topic of your brother.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you added in moments that you went through together although they were hard times. I also enjoyed how you put in different common phrases to show how close you are to your brother.
ReplyDeleteDarryl- I liked that you talked about your brother and
ReplyDeletekept bringing up your bond with him
first of all your poem is a great touching poem. i Also liked the part of the poem where you stated “blood thicker than water” because it really brings together the whole meaning of your poem. great job
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DeleteBraun-I thought you did a good job talking about what has happened in your past, I know how hard it is to do that. I also liked how you added family into the main part of your poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you showed how much you love your brother and how much he means to you because it doesn't seem like it when you talk about him.
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