We gather for family discussions in our living room
We lay our hearts out across the sofa
But the adults change the channel on the child’s perspective
Home sweet Home
There’s always someone who can spread a lighter mood
Butter you up with hugs and kisses
To nourish your heart and spirit
Home sweet home
Shouting and screaming cuss words at us when my mom is upset
Like a bad stomach
So hurt on the inside we lose control on our exterior
Home sweet home
It prepares a map that shall lead me to greatness
My home has made My mind a gps
I am able to redirect myself
Into the right direction
When mistakes come my way
Home Sweet home
A perfect home is what you consider perfect
Throughout very inconsolable moments where we weren't able to let go of hurt
To moments where we never want to leave each other sides
Cause thatś what love does to a person
Home sweet home
i like how she talked about the thick and thin and made it into a good thing.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you compared your mind to a GPS, and overall it was really a really good poem!!!!
ReplyDeletehow was it really a really good poem?
Deletei like how she includes the bad things because nothing is perfect. I'm glad she included the good, the bad, and the ugly
ReplyDeleteI like how your poem discuss the issues that you have and it shows how everybody is not perfect.
ReplyDeleteGET IT GIRL!
ReplyDeleteI think it was really deep, it had some different ways of thinking. She made the home experience very real, especially on how home is not always happy home is caprious and crazy but in the end love is love. Great Job
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DeleteYASSSSSSSSSSSSSS, gabby i loved the metaphors you used in the "We lay our hearts out across the sofa
ReplyDeleteBut the adults change the channel on the child’s perspective" and how you used repetition of your poem girl you
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i loved your poem and how you used reptition to remind the reader that in the good and in the bad that it is home sweet home great job (@:
ReplyDeleteI like how you always come back to the phrase, "Home Sweet Home". This poem is very endearing and gives me a great visual of what your home is like and who you are as a person.
ReplyDeleteshe didn't describe what it looks like, she described the atmosphere
DeleteYes, that is true but the atmosphere of the house describes the kind of people that live there and how they would decorate their property.
DeleteI understand what you're saying. Home is where there is family, happiness, wildness (is that a word), guidance, and where you belong.
ReplyDeleteSLAYED!
ReplyDeleteI love how you not only touched the good things in your home but the bad things too. I feel like putting the lines such as "Shouting and screaming cuss words" and "Throughout very inconsolable moments where we weren't able to let go of hurt" shows that you know your home isn't perfect but you and your family are able to put aside the bad in order to spend the good times with each other.
I love how you celebrate the ups and down of home. Nobody's home is perfect, and you do an excellent job of revealing the dysfunction and the beauty of the dysfunction. This is the type of poem that everyone can identify with because you humanize what it mens to be in a family and be part of a family.
ReplyDeleteThere's a lot of richness in the ways you play with language throughout, and I'm happy to see the conversation we had inspired you to continue down this path.
Really enjoyed this poem!
i don't like how she put her mom cursing at her in there
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DeleteI like how you used different ways to express what you feel happens in the comfort of your own home or the emotions that go through you at that moment.
ReplyDeletei like how you kept repeating the same sentence at the end of each line which all reminded us of what the big picture of the poem was. Also how you were talking about how your home was
ReplyDeleteit was deep and i thought you were very open and very muture about your poem
ReplyDeletei liked how you used repetation when you say home sweet home because it ties the whole poem together. i also liked how you described and wrote more of your perspective then how your home looks.
ReplyDeleteI liked the repetition of home sweet home. I liked the figurative language like similes and metaphors. I also like the vocabulary that you used in your poem.
ReplyDeleteI liked how after every stanza you said home sweet home. Your poem was very powerful. Very strong vocab and use of wording. You had good use of metaphor throughout. You made your experience of home well explained.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used repetition by saying home sweet home
ReplyDeleteI liked how you kept on repeating the same phrase, I thought it was very powerful. You also did a good job representing your home how it is not how you want it to be.
ReplyDeleteI liked how your poem was talking about your home. I also liked the line where it says "My home has made My mind a gps,
ReplyDeleteI am able to redirect myself". Another thing I liked when she said "Home Sweet Home" after each stanza.